just a suggestion authority.. your story has too many people to given remember who is who and all the people are there with no specific importance you have given less conversation between ML and FL where as 60% of your story is covered with supporting roles conversation which was unnecessary.
I'm not scolding you it's just a suggestion otherwise good job on the story line.
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misaki
just a suggestion authority.. your story has too many people to given remember who is who and all the people are there with no specific importance
you have given less conversation between ML and FL where as 60% of your story is covered with supporting roles conversation which was unnecessary.
I'm not scolding you it's just a suggestion
otherwise good job on the story line.
2025-11-26
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