My honest thoughts about this story are that in the first chapter, I got confused about the characters' details, especially their connections to each other. I was also confused about what the parentheses referred to, their emotions or actions. Additionally, the POV felt a bit messy, and it seemed like the chapters weren't aligned with what the plot wanted to portray. Despite the confusion, the engaging characters kept me reading, Although there were grammatical errors, they didn't detract from the story's overall impact. Errors are common in every story, and as long as the narrative remains understandable, they're manageable. However, the story had several lacks. The emotions and actions weren't well develop. Each chapter was also very short, feeling like just a conversation without narrative or clear POV. It didn't feel like a story, just a series of conversations without dynamics. The characters didn't have proper communication or romantic development. I felt like I was reading a transcript rather than a story.
2025-06-23
0
Nike Nike
The story was interesting but it really do lack emotions like the feelings is not quite dere it just feels like they were just strangers trying to stay together even the story lacks wat causes lixin to be like thst wat about his elder brother and and the way u just summarize is thsts not how stories are suppose to be hav read a lot and this it’s just okay everyone just seem too serious even wen they joke its doesn’t seems funny but it’s good just not wat I was expecting since hav been seeing it I want it to be completed before reading so that I will enjoy I won’t hav to wait but this is not wat I was expecting
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Wade
My honest thoughts about this story are that in the first chapter, I got confused about the characters' details, especially their connections to each other. I was also confused about what the parentheses referred to, their emotions or actions. Additionally, the POV felt a bit messy, and it seemed like the chapters weren't aligned with what the plot wanted to portray. Despite the confusion, the engaging characters kept me reading, Although there were grammatical errors, they didn't detract from the story's overall impact. Errors are common in every story, and as long as the narrative remains understandable, they're manageable. However, the story had several lacks. The emotions and actions weren't well develop. Each chapter was also very short, feeling like just a conversation without narrative or clear POV. It didn't feel like a story, just a series of conversations without dynamics. The characters didn't have proper communication or romantic development. I felt like I was reading a transcript rather than a story.
2025-06-23
0
Nike Nike
The story was interesting but it really do lack emotions like the feelings is not quite dere it just feels like they were just strangers trying to stay together even the story lacks wat causes lixin to be like thst wat about his elder brother and and the way u just summarize is thsts not how stories are suppose to be hav read a lot and this it’s just okay everyone just seem too serious even wen they joke its doesn’t seems funny but it’s good just not wat I was expecting since hav been seeing it I want it to be completed before reading so that I will enjoy I won’t hav to wait but this is not wat I was expecting
2025-06-14
3
Hannie
Why is it ending????? 😭😭😭
2025-06-13
4