As for the smut part it's good just the chapter doesn't feel like they are having deep love making scene, it feels too causual to read, the love connection isn't there I think, I hope you understand what I'm trying to say.. again since it's the first time writing such scenes isn't easy so I think you'll definitely improve yourself. even if you don't describe smut in too detail it's the emotions and the way you describe their feelings what makes reading smut enjoyable and interesting.. Thank you 💜💜
2026-07-10
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Suyami🖤
I read first few chapter and honestly since it's your first story I don't want to judge you cause your writing in redemption story is excellent, like there is emotional depth and all and proper explanation and dialogues compared to this story I just can't relate or connect with this storyline much like in other story, but like a said you have improved yourself a lot.. and hope you'll keep writing
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Suyami🖤
As for the smut part it's good just the chapter doesn't feel like they are having deep love making scene, it feels too causual to read, the love connection isn't there I think, I hope you understand what I'm trying to say.. again since it's the first time writing such scenes isn't easy so I think you'll definitely improve yourself. even if you don't describe smut in too detail it's the emotions and the way you describe their feelings what makes reading smut enjoyable and interesting.. Thank you 💜💜
2026-07-10
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Suyami🖤
I read first few chapter and honestly since it's your first story I don't want to judge you cause your writing in redemption story is excellent, like there is emotional depth and all and proper explanation and dialogues compared to this story I just can't relate or connect with this storyline much like in other story, but like a said you have improved yourself a lot.. and hope you'll keep writing
2026-07-10
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Suyami🖤
hott/Awkward//Awkward/
2026-07-10
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