Author sorry for what I'm going to say will offend you but I think you need to make more conversations with characters as it's a chat story . your writing is so good but the only flaw is that it's more like a novel and only few conversations are between the characters
2025-11-06
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Here_To_Kick@Your_Ass
we can see ruyi babe 🤧
2026-03-09
2
Kiki@060Sh
wait😳 does he know that this all is a novel like mc or smth thus he's acting away from plot unknowingly
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shristi
Author sorry for what I'm going to say will offend you but I think you need to make more conversations with characters as it's a chat story . your writing is so good but the only flaw is that it's more like a novel and only few conversations are between the characters
2025-11-06
0
Here_To_Kick@Your_Ass
we can see ruyi babe 🤧
2026-03-09
2
Kiki@060Sh
wait😳 does he know that this all is a novel like mc or smth thus he's acting away from plot unknowingly
2025-12-03
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