okay so I'm not going to lie to you it's good but make it more better choose the emojis correctly to their line emotions and which really match that expression and don't use capital letter to describe day and other just use that to name the place that's enough and the Start is good but I find it not that much affectionate the other story I love it in just first chapter which this story is not giving so much of the vibe which the first one was giving
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Yuna💜BTS forever 💜😍💐
okay so I'm not going to lie to you it's good but make it more better choose the emojis correctly to their line emotions and which really match that expression and don't use capital letter to describe day and other just use that to name the place that's enough and the Start is good but I find it not that much affectionate the other story I love it in just first chapter which this story is not giving so much of the vibe which the first one was giving
2026-06-01
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