You know , you should not directly tell anyone , your past so easily , it will Jill the excitement of the readers . Like , first day she met the male , then became friends , get to know about the male past , an old man came out of nowhere started to do harsh things on the female , then became lovers and get marriage.
You should not start like that , it will take away the interest ...
Try to make story more curious like the
“Ash Katz” (writer ) sorry for dragging another writer.
Hope you will try to make progress... But I like your story and I will love it if you follow my leads.
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“Silver Wings ” ( Writer)
You know , you should not directly tell anyone , your past so easily , it will Jill the excitement of the readers .
Like , first day she met the male , then became friends , get to know about the male past , an old man came out of nowhere started to do harsh things on the female , then became lovers and get marriage.
You should not start like that , it will take away the interest ...
Try to make story more curious like the
“Ash Katz” (writer )
sorry for dragging another writer.
Hope you will try to make progress...
But I like your story and I will love it if you follow my leads.
2021-01-04
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Ash Katz
ohkay... it's going alright..
2020-12-25
2