I really like your plot so far but I would like to give some constructive criticism, please dont mind it i genuinely really like your writing style and the plot I think that for the past few stories of this story u have been overdoing the whole mysterious way of talking and there is a repetition of lines like "there it is- honest, too honest" in my opinion the speaker does not need to notice the obvious details loudly ur readers r smart enough to know that speaker has noticed
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persiphone
I really like your plot so far but I would like to give some constructive criticism, please dont mind it i genuinely really like your writing style and the plot
I think that for the past few stories of this story u have been overdoing the whole mysterious way of talking
and there is a repetition of lines like "there it is- honest, too honest"
in my opinion the speaker does not need to notice the obvious details loudly
ur readers r smart enough to know that speaker has noticed
2026-05-21
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SPÈÑÇÉR
don't stop
just update more 🥹🥹
2026-05-21
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Joy D
Really, you should feel it too /Smug/
2026-07-11
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