Okay. Personal thought. I feel like this should've been 3rd person. It would've made it more distinct than the other chapters. But still, it does its job well. Furthermore, you should've built a bit more on the atmosphere during the chase and the horror part. Overall tho, it's peak. The voice this chapter was great. We're finally going to understand the "Rift" in the title. PS: The spirit's descriptions reminded me A LOT about Turbo Granny from DanDaDan. 9/10
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Mellord 🌸🎶
Okay. Personal thought. I feel like this should've been 3rd person. It would've made it more distinct than the other chapters. But still, it does its job well. Furthermore, you should've built a bit more on the atmosphere during the chase and the horror part. Overall tho, it's peak. The voice this chapter was great. We're finally going to understand the "Rift" in the title.
PS: The spirit's descriptions reminded me A LOT about Turbo Granny from DanDaDan. 9/10
2026-02-02
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